Good story, good pacing, good voice acting
There's very little to be critical of in this Flash. You certainly got a style going and it's nice to see something different on NG.
The only thing I would say you should improve on is something art-related, but it's not the animation itself--the transitions are fluid and so is the motion concerning the characters--your perspective is off at times and it throws the feel of the scene away, even if only a little. There's a style to your characters and especially your backgrounds that is good on its own, and I urge you to continue with that style. No, it's not elegant or involved, but it has character and quirks. :D
Another point I can make is the lady's mic has a little bit of hiss left over, which is fairly easy to treat in most audio editing software. I only heard it with my volume up, though, and I had to listen for it for the most part.
Can't wait for episode 3! :D
- Chocolate Soda Productions
I've gotta show this to my friend Jade--she's a total TF2 nerd and she'll love it as much as I did. :D
FUCK YEAH MASTODON!
I've always loved the comic version, but this flash is just fucking awesome!
My buddy Ryan likes to take the comic and use different Mastodon song lyrics--some of them are just fucking hilarious. "The Czar" was definitely amusing.
RIDE THE TIDES OF BLOOD, ILLUMINATION!
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